Rewrite this paragraph in simple sentences.
IT was a bright cold day in April . The clocks were striking thirteen . Winston Smith’s chin nuzzled into his chest . In an effort to escape the vile wind . He slipped quickly through the glass doors of Victory mansion . Though not quickly enough to prevent a swirl of gritty dust from entring along with him .
November 16, 2012 at 2:23 pm
Jameel, you’re getting very close to getting it correct. Check this sentence, though:
“In an effort to escape the vile wind”
and this one:
“Though not quickly enough to prevent a swirl of gritty dust from entering along with him .”
The reason they don’t work as simple sentences is because you have not removed the subordinating conjunctions. See if you can find them – and if you can’t, let me know.
They should work as stand-alone sentences!
Righto!
Mr Waugh